Thread:Octofan/@comment-4698889-20161008042148/@comment-6986530-20161008190758

Welp it ate my comment but.

The page is otherwise postable, but the Personality and Traits really could benefit from being more organized. You repeated the same information twice about Loki hating Gallerian for excelling and wanting to kill him, on two different paragraphs, and the points of info don't always look to relate to each other. You also made no mention of Loki being an HER.

I think it would benefit from you assigning a theme to each paragraph, instead of just presenting info in what looks like roughly chronological order. Such as, his relationship with Gallerian (faux friendship, hating him, and yet also being enraged at his "betrayal") being one paragraph, his cruel HER nature in another, etc.