Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-6192846-20141127231817/@comment-6192846-20150818031449

Yes, the original assumes too much about readers being listeners of the song and doesn't treat itself as its own work. I welcome there actually being written context and build up that still preserves the misleading action mothy was going for. I think it makes the scene much stronger and flow more naturally.

I also congratulate mothy on better integrating Riliane into the story even when she's not present. Having her murder the messenger man and direct Gumillia to force Allen to do the delivery, as well as send off the prestigious General Mouchet to Retasan because she didn't like his beard made for both great (and dark) comedy and more explicit reminders about why things are only getting worse over time with Riliane's rule.