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Here's my coverage for the changes in the VG version of Cloture of Yellow. As these are one giant pain in the neck, I haven't mined the new or heavily edited scenes in full detail but will answer what I can about them in the mean time.

The only scene I'm going to be staying vague on is the Leonhart and Allen fight scene because there's just so many differences and additions mixed in with the old that it'll take more time on my end.

General Chapter 1: Section 1 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Chapter 1: Scene 2 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Chapter 2: Section 1 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7  Scene 8 Chapter 2, Section 2 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 5 Scene 8 Scene 9 Chapter 3, Section 1 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 5 Scene 7 Scene 8 Chapter 3, Section 2 Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 5 Scene 7 Scene 8 Chapter 4 Scene 2 Scene 7
 * Allen’s mentions of Leonhart and Mariam in narration are changed to “adoptive father” and “head maid” respectively; the relevant sentences are sometimes changed, though they lose no significant meaning.
 * Allen’s new reference to Leonhart has his “adoptive father” returns to being simply “Leonhart” following his discovery of the man’s “betrayal”.
 * Several lines of narration (specifically pure exposition) by Allen were changed to have more of his sarcasm and snarky personality filtering the delivery.
 * Opening narration concerning Levin Church bell is expanded, talking more about how the bell could be heard from anywhere in town, even the far away place they were at, signaling the time so he wouldn’t even have to look at his pocket watch.
 * Allen’s interchange with Chartette is changed slightly, adding more narration describing who Mariam is (and why you shouldn’t be caught not working on her watch) among other details in description interspersed between the dialogue.
 * Allen’s narration about him and Chartette talking casually due to their long relationship since their youth is cut.
 * Allen’s narration concerning Ney is expanded to better portray why he chose her specifically to take his place, as well as mentioning her being the head maid’s adopted daughter.
 * Leonhart’s commentary about Riliane needing to think more about her people is expanded, Allen now arguing it with him before Leonhart finally coughs and changes the subject to Josephine to ease the awkward air.
 * Allen’s narration describing his realization it Ney’s screaming is changed for clarity; less emotional involvement now.
 * New narration starting the scene describing the forest’s lush trees and its connection to the earth god, Held, as well as Allen’s feeling it’s “gloomy” whether it be because his faith isn’t enough or because of its name as the “Forest of Bewilderment”.
 * Narration describing Leonhart tracking Josephine slightly rewritten for clarity.
 * Allen’s narration mentioning the backdoor in the fireplace is changed to a thought with parentheses and a “huh?” added after the elipses.
 * New thought by Allen following his narration recalling the beach: (Just maybe—-)
 * Narration inserted describing Leonhart’s initial surprise when Allen says he’s going on ahead.
 * Leonhart’s last line is now proceeded with “I’ll say it again,”.
 * Allen’s last line of narration is changed to a thought with parentheses.
 * Allen’s narration about the coast is slightly expanded, describing in more detail how he identified Jospehine (Lucifenian royal family’s coat of arms on the saddle).
 * Allen’s narration concerning Riliane’s reaction to Leonhart is expanded slightly
 * Allen’s narration describing Riliane’s tantrum is condensed slightly.
 * Allen’s apology for ruining Riliane’s plans has been changed to use more kani in it than just hiragana.
 * A new thought by Allen is added after hearing Riliane mutter about trying to kill Leonhart with her scratch: “(…… Honestly, same as ever)”
 * Allen’s narration thinking back on the day he last tend to her wounds is changed to a thought in parentheses.
 * Allen’s narration thinking about Riliane’s hand has been slightly rewritten with additional details and his usual snark about how obviously her tyrannical hand is warm because she’s a human, not a doll, so wondering that on his part was silly.
 * Allen’s last bit of narration flashbacking to him and Riliane as kids is changed to a thought in parentheses.
 * Narration about the sun setting expanded slightly.
 * New narration added describing Riliane not seeing through his lie about riding a horse.
 * Allen’s “?” after hearing Riliane say she’s alone is removed.
 * New narration cocnerning Leonhart’s vague comment about there being all kinds of women in the country, reflecting it was probably “adult circumstances” and that he always treated him like a child and blurred the story. If he insisted, his adoptive father would see him more and more as an unreasonable brat so he always quietly backed down.
 * Allen’s narration regarding his reaction to Mariam accurately surmising his reactions is expanded to more explicitly point out she’s accurate.
 * New narration added explicitly describing Mariam’s look immediately changed to that of the stiff “head maid” prompting Allen to correct his lack of honorifics toward Riliane.
 * Allen’s narration regarding the incident was slightly expanded, including more details regarding the events with the Minister of Interior Affairs trying to eliminate the Three Heroes.
 * Allen’s narration regarding Elluka and Mariam likely not mentioning why Riliane doesn’t remember him is expanded, now more explicitly pointing out the possibility Elluka and the others aren’t mentioning the past out of consideration for Riliane.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, Allen now points out the fact that blood was shed and Riliane herself was acting a little strange and could’ve possibly had her young mind scarred before Allen trails back to his original digression that whenever him and his sister come up, things get messy.
 * Allen’s narration after Minis speaks is slightly changed for literary flow, one new line recalling Leonhart’s words from the garden while he works.
 * Allen’s narration concerning Riliane coming up with making the cake that morning has been expanded, now detailing that Ney told him the story.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, Allen now considers that it must’ve instead occurred after her escape from the palace as she planned to have Leonhart’s position jeopardized with her stunt before admitting that her behavior and actions aren’t very consistent to begin with.
 * Chartette’s squiggles in her first line of dialogue are changed to regular “~”.
 * Allen’s line about not understanding why/how Riliane is “lonely” is changed for literary flow and to better portray his emotional loss at it.
 * Germaine’s opening drunken line is made more clear what it’s saying and therefore less drawn out.
 * Several of Germaine’s narrative exposition in her first scene have been converted to explicit half-drunken ravings by her.
 * Prior to Germaine mentioning the “royal palace”, a narration is inserted elaborating that Leonhart was beloved by the people but that rumors from some among them claimed he was a “minion of the aristocracy”.
 * Continuing the previous bullet, Germaine narrates it’s untrue, pointing out Leonhart was born a commoner unlike the noble families Generals Mouchet and Ausdin were born into and still refused to be granted noble status despite being known as one of the “Three Heroes”.
 * Still continuing off the previous bullet, his refusal to be anything more than a commoner precedes his choice of residence downtown away from the royal capital of Lucifenian instead of in the palace with what meager meals they have.
 * After Allen mentions how Leonhart has somehow avoided being executed, he notes how it may not last long as Riliane’s self-indulgence is getting worse and worse every day. He mentions how recently the famed commander General Mouchet was relegated to the remote Retasan Fortress because “I’m not fond of excessively long beards.”
 * Some of Allen’s narration pertaining to his encounter with Asan was changed to better pace the fight and get into Allen’s mindset.
 * Additional detail added that Riliane was pale but without a scratch after Allen tackled Asan.
 * Bolded portions of text from Allen’s encounter with Asan was changed to regular narration describing actions, parentheses being used for thoughts.
 * After Allen’s narration describes Asan’s beheading the next day, it continues to mention that the servant didn’t have time to mourn the death of a colleague, as they may be the ones who are next tomorrow.
 * Allen’s narration regarding Riliane’s mentality about “everything in the palace” being hers was changed to add more “personality” to the exposition.
 * Allen’s narration after Riliane asks about him using a sword slightly expands, explicitly pointing out her seeing him use one before her eyes.
 * Conversation between Leonhart and Germaine during the last meeting is greatly expanded, inserting additional dialogue concerning Leonhart’s desire for atonement from wartime actions.
 * Allen’s narration regarding his decision not to kill Riliane is expanded, explicitly deliberating other scenarios Allen could take at this juncture and their consequences, as well as better establishing why he doesn’t want Riliane dead either and puts up with her awful behavior.
 * Ney’s entrance into the scene is expanded upon, receiving additional dialogue wondering “what’s wrong”, prompting Allen to look up and notice her having entered the Servant Room.
 * Allen’s narration regarding his feelings of disbelief and betrayal from being used are expanded upon, new narration better illustrating these feelings and his reasons for ultimately believing Ney’s claim.
 * Allen’s narration about the story of Leonhart loving Queen Anne is slightly changed to also suggest Riliane may have heard the story from Ney like him.
 * Allen’s narration describing him gradually closing the distance between him and Leonhart is replaced with narration regarding Allen seeing Leonhart’s face was red but his eyes were staring at him composed.
 * So much, I don’t want to talk about it.
 * Germaine’s mention about Mariam in narration is expanded, adding that she really wanted Allen and Chartette there but that they apparently couldn’t get permission to go to the funeral from Riliane.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, new narration from Germaine citing Allen “surely” would’ve mourned him.
 * Germaine’s mention about Elluka in narration is expanding, noting how Elluka and who looked to be her apprentice joined the two of them. After she gave a small nod to Germaine, Elluka continues with calling him an “idiot” before leaving.
 * Allen’s narration regarding burning the forest is changed; parentheses are used to denote the exact thought.
 * Allen’s narration about him being a servant ignorant about politics wasn’t the only one confused about Elphegort’s patronage was reworded for clarity of meaning.
 * Allen’s narration about Elphegort’s odd request was reworded for clarity.
 * Keel’s given name and surname divider is changed from a dot to a “=“ for consistency with other Evillious media.
 * Allen’s narration speculating about Keel’s motives were slightly reworded to better portray his curiosity about him.
 * Allen and Gumillia’s dialogue is expanded to elaborate on why Allen is entrusted with delivering Gumillia’s gift to her friend.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, new narration describe Riliane having executed the delivery man the day prior (along with 15 other people since the beginning of the year) was added, slowing down everything in terms of communications.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, Gumillia was told a servant would do whatever requested and when Allen asks, Gumillia says Riliane was the one who told her, making him sigh in his mind.
 * Allen’s dialogue with Gumillia is changed, Allen’s cut off line continuing all the way, prompting Gumillia to tell him he’s surely meet “Michaela” so long as he had the green onion. She confirms Michaela’s her friend’s name before saying goodbye and leaving.
 * New narration beginning scene was added, expanding on Allen’s dilemma of trying to find someone by the name of “Michaela”, including his inability to even distinguish the person’s gender by the name.
 * A “(What is that?)” thought line is added between Allen noticing the crowd gathered in Aceid and him actually approaching it.
 * New exchanged added between five year old girl and Allen, the former pointing out the latter’s bag was glowing. His examination of this is interrupted by the crowd’s thunderous applause (replaces Allen’s narration of Michaela bowing after finishing singing).
 * New narration added after Allen narrates about Michaela calling him “cute”, pointing out the green onion glowing to her song and her being named “Michaela” supporting his belief she’s Gumillia’s friend.
 * Michaela’s “……!” reaction to Allen’s mention of Gumillia was omitted and Allen’s narration about it was slightly expanded.
 * Line of narration added after Allen’s narration questioning what’s so amazing about the green onion, pointing out it’s previous glow and being an object from a mage apprentice suggesting it may be a magic tool.
 * New narration inserted in between Michaela’s thank you to Allen and her asking his name, elaborating Allen’s decision not to pry into it more and expanding on Michaela’s reaction to not knowing his name yet.
 * Allen’s narration summarizing Michaela’s explanation about her past with Clarith explicitly mentions Yatski village.
 * New dialogue for Allen inserted between Michaela’s exposition about Clarith, pointing out she says “like” as if she wouldn’t know about her hardships when they should’ve both been living in the same village, prompting Michaela to cover for herself before continuing as is.
 * Slight rewording of several sentences for clarity and better rewording for Allen’s thought process.
 * A “(! Since when did he come into the room!?)” thought line was added following Gast’s commentary about Clarith being a Netsuma along with new narration questioning who he is.
 * Allen’s narration describing Gast’s hair and sword is reworded for new literary flow.
 * Gast and Allen’s dialogue concerning his “katana” is extended to elaborate on Allen’s apparent knowledge about the weapon and its history going from Jakoku to Evillious and why Gast was able to acquire one.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Allen’s dialogue with Gast continues to clarify Gast’s origins, slightly expanding some dialogue to explain how he knows Allen’s a servant from Lucifenia.
 * Allen’s narration expressing surprise about Gast’s identity is changed to an actual thought line with parentheses.
 * Allen’s narration regarding the darkness in his eyes is expanded.
 * Keel and Allen’s dialogue concerning Gast is slightly extended.
 * Allen’s narration about Keel clearly knowing about Mariam being one of the Three Heroes and therefore too close to the royal family was changed into a line of dialogue from Keel in response to Allen mentioning he could’ve had the head maid come instead.
 * Allen’s narration commenting on Keel’s motives is changed to a thought line with parentheses.
 * New narration inserted after Allen’s initial reaction to Keel questioning if he was in love with Michaela, pondering the idea and pointing out the fact he only just met her.
 * Narration concerning Allen’s thoughts regarding Michaela’s suitors and her shell pendant expanded, adding Allen’s deduction of his chances as a servant and brief consideration of revealing himself as a Lucifenian prince before immediately dropping the idea as ludicrous (and thankful Keel didn’t seem to read him).
 * This scene exists. It is a completely new scene portraying Allen’s arrival at the royal palace late that night and meeting with Chartette. Scene concerns Riliane apparently somehow getting on the roof; expands themes of day & night/sun & moon and Riliane’s connection to Anne.
 * Minis’ squiggly opening line in the scene was changed to a normal “~”.
 * Minis’ answer to Riliane when asking what the strange octopus was is changed from an “infant octopus” to an “infant “aotako”” to match name usage in other media.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Minis statement that it isn’t eaten/edible is qualified now with an “almost/practically”.
 * Allen’s narration regarding is is expanded to say that Minis’ complexion was the same as the “aotako” before correcting that it was an even deeper blue than it.
 * New narration added describing how Riliane was smiling at first while reading Kyle’s letter it gradually began to flush.
 * Narration after Minis’ line attempting to explain situation was changed to accommodate previous change, now describing how Riliane’s eyes were already filled with anger.
 * Riliane received new line in response to Minis’ exposition about the letter’s contents: “I know! He wrote such in the letter!!”
 * Minis’ line explaining Kyle seemingly fell in love with a green-haired girl is expanded to also mention she’s seemingly from Elphegort.
 * Allen’s narration concerning his consideration to kill Kyle is significantly expanded, better portraying his conflicting guilt over Leonhart’s murder in correlation to his increasing extremity to protect Riliane regardless of who he must kill.
 * Germaine’s narration concerning the house recently being in use is expanded, elaborating on how said old dilapidated house underwent simple repairs to keep it livable and “surprisingly” had furniture and tableware left there, and was essentially needed for a hideout.
 * New narration added expanding on Germaine’s choice of setting up a resistance to oppose Riliane.
 * Mariam’s report about her failure to find Kyle’s lover is expanded, beginning with pointing out the likliehood she was an Elphen royal or Elphegortean noble but inability to ascertain her true identity.
 * Allen’s narration concerning Keel’s earlier words to him is expanding, additionally pondering him possibly being involved somehow when Riliane’s scream interrupts his train of thought.
 * New dialogue between Riliane and Minis is inserted after Riliane orders him to have the army invade and kill all green-haired women. His initial protest is immediately cut off by Riliane as she stubbornly insists he prepare the forces to depart right away.
 * New narration is inserted after Minis points out the forest blocking Elphegort, Allen explaining Minis trying to avoid outright disagreeing with Riliane (due to the danger of that) by pointing out the geographic problems to deter her instead, which unexpectedly has the opposite effect.
 * New narration added after Riliane says she wants the forest burned, Allen admitting he said the same thing in his sickened stupor but Riliane is different since what she says really happens as per Lucifenia’s status quo and wondering who can stop her.
 * Elluka’s lecture toward Riliane is slightly changed, almost calling Held by name before correcting herself. Riliane interrupts original line to scoff that she’s stupid as “there are no gods or demons”.
 * Continuing previous bullet, Elluka’s commentary includes a line about not caring for her sins/crimes, just the deadly sin(s) and staring downcast in amazement.
 * Continuing previous bullet, Allen additionally narrates about Elluka’s claim to be a mage and the mysterious events.
 * Elluka’s continuing line telling Riliane not to be a fool and destroy a country out of jealousy since her parents and them never did, adding that she knows she’s the most ignorant and stupid monarch ever to govern the same or even more so than Anne.
 * Continuing previous bullet, Riliane demanding Elluka be beheaded is expanded, Riliane outraged by Elluka’s disrespectful reference to Anne by name without honorifics and having finally been done with Elluka’s rude attitude she’s been “condoning” up until now before spouting the same beheading line.
 * New narration about Allen pointing out they’ve both lost their cool and his uncertainty about what to do before these two powerful women.
 * Allen’s narration after Elluka notices and addresses him expands on his fear despite his prior dedication to Riliane.
 * Allen’s dialogue with Elluka is expanded, the fearful Allen silently being petted on the head by Elluka (cold hand versus Riliane’s warm hand) as she thanks him for doing the earlier errand for Gumillia in her place. She therefore tells him about Lucifenia’s fated destruction as a reward.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Allen’s suprise is expanded to ask if that’s a “prediction/prophecy” and she assures him it doesn’t matter if she’s captured.
 * Mariam’s reaction to new dialogue is added, staring at her friend with a surprised face: “Elluka… What are you…”
 * Continuing from previous point, Elluka points out how surely she vaguely felt it, pointing out Leonhart surely did and that they all were working hard because they could feel the country was becoming “hopeless” but admitting it was impossible as the gear already went out of control.
 * Allen’s narration is expanded to point out Elluka stoops low to his face when then asking if he’ll run away with her now that he’s heard her prediction.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Allen exclaims the country won’t be destroyed and he won’t run away unlike her, arousing Elluka’s anger again, prompting her to yell “Don’t be cheeky/conceited!” and slaps him against the wall.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Elluka rants about the absoluteness of her “purple dream”. Allen’s narration ponders if said “purple” dream” is her “prophecy” and describes Elluka’s sad expression indicates she was neither lying nor joking, better portraying his belief in her.
 * Allen’s bolded line about protecting Riliane and the country has been slightly changed, adding a “Still” precediing the “I”.
 * Continuing from previous point, Elluka rants more how he’s being unreasonable, pointing out how she knows Riliane will die at the guillotine, having seen it in her dream.
 * Continuing from previous point, Mariam yells “Elluka!” followed by a loud sound echoing in the hall, Mariam having slapped Elluka’s cheek, lecturing she’s being unreasonable now. Elluka apologizes for getting too excited and returns to her “usual” calm as Allen narrates.
 * Elluka’s line telling Allen to take care of Riliane if he won’t take her word for it is expanded, adding that she wonders if he can change fate and cause an “irregular” (irregularity) in the prophecy (pointedly wondering if he can do it).
 * Germaine’s narration about Minage being from Elphegort is slightly expanding, adding that he was worried about his homeland.
 * Allen’s narration about the genocide to the country now more specifically refers to “Elphegort” as the country being talked bout.
 * Keels’ dialogue with Allen is slightly changed, now noticing something before asking “Is there someone over there?” Allen looks back and the narration about what looked to be a dark figure by the stairwell continues.
 * Continuing from previous point, Allen now asks “Who are you!?” and he approaches when there’s no response to confirm there’s no one before returning to Keel and letting him continue his exposition story.
 * Michaela’s narration about Clarith slightly changed, Allen’s narration now mentioning her tears welling up before she proclaims she’s a coward who abandoned her friend.
 * Allen’s narration admitting he’s in love with her is expanded, additionally pondering the fact he met her through Gumillia/Elluka and wondering why Michaela is acquainted with a Lucifenian court mage and (more importantly) what in the world that green onion was.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Allen’s narration moves onto ponder what to do about Michaela since he wasn’t formally ordered to kill her like with Elluka but admitting she’s a necessary sacrifice to prevent Riliane’s wrath from even reaching Marlon should Kyle get a hold of her.
 * Continuing from previous point, if the eastern Asmodean and southern Beelzenia take advantage of the opportunity, they might got to war with Lucifenia, which would drag the entirety of Evillious into massive war and it would be as Elluka says, Lucifenia would be destroyed and Riliane would die.
 * Continuing from previous point, Allen still doesn’t want Michaela to die despite all that because he’s in love with her, finally leading back to the original narration about his impulse to run away with her.
 * Allen’s leaving of Michaela is expanded to include the information provided from Michaela’s perspective in Wiegenlied of his failed confession to her.
 * New narration after Allen brushes of Ney’s apology, connecting the dots between her and who Keel saw. He considers attacking her for that but disregards the idea as his fault for carelessly uttering the conversation.
 * Allen’s answer to Ney’s question about him killing Michaela is broken up to include a “……” after Allen’s “I don’t know” and a “! Allen…..” in place of her original “Allen……”
 * New narration added to better portray Ney’s shock and implicit understanding of his words “this may be farewell soon”.
 * Allen’s final narration about not sleeping until morning is expanded, now narrating he finally came to his conclusion.
 * This scene is now a scene. Allen’s dialogue from Michaela’s perspective in Wiegenlied is added and his narration expands on his inner thoughts (sadness) regarding the scene he sees (also continues implicating him as the murderer).
 * Allen’s narration regarding his surprise Chartette can read is reworded for clarity.
 * New narration is added to expand upon Allen’s wonder if Chartette has “grown”, wondering what growth means and if it means killing people and seeing death, which he’s now seen with Leonhart and Michaela.
 * Continuing from previous bullet, Allen’s narration devolves about how many have died in the war, narrating to his sister why she won’t stop it already, wondering why she won’t stop since another war is senseless.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, Allen narrates that Riliane doesn’t hear the voice of his mind speaking to her, not caring about the war outside. She’s enjoying a conversation with her maids. Maybe if she saw it firsthand it would be different, but she doesn’t care.
 * Dialogue between ministers is slightly expanding, going into more details about General Ausdin in relation to the war and point out why General Mouchet’s forces can’t be recalled either or risk being struck from behind by Beelzenia during their precarious situation.
 * Allen’s narration about what’s transpired is expanded, now more explicitly reflecting his feeling of loss with Michaela’s death, not seeing any point in the war continuing at this point and feeling simply empty inside with how things are at this point.
 * Allen’s narration about Marlon staying uninvolved thus far is expanded, also covering his wonder if Marlon does get dragged into this war, then what did Michaela die for?
 * Allen’s narration about Mariam’s entrance is expanded, adding his view that it may be his imagination, but she looked rather hostile toward Gast.
 * Allen’s line exclaiming “Head Maid!” is gone and skips to Gast’s dialogue after a space in the text.
 * After hearing Gast’s answer that he’s looking for “a place to die”, Allen’s narration describes that the image of his dying “adoptive father” comes to mind (correcting himself to say “Leonhart” instead).
 * This scene exists. It is a completely new scene portraying Allen looking for Riliane all over before finding her at the rooftop garden again. Expands more on Riliane’s relationship with her mother and Allen’s frustration with resigning himself to just being a “servant”.
 * Allen convinces Riliane to propose ending the war with Elphegort during a future meeting with the ministers.
 * Allen’s narration about Elluka’s earlier prophecy is expanded slightly, better portraying his desperation to try changing fate (hoping Riliane ending the war will go as planned) while being helpless to know what’s right or wrong anymore.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, Allen’s insistence Riliane is the lonely one before realizing it’s him who’s lonely is expanded to better portray his thought process.
 * Space for “And……” on Germaine’s second to last line of narration is removed and made part of the prior line, likely to keep from trailing onto next page.
 * New narration added after Allen’s mention he’s eavesdropping on the meeting in the Hall of Sounds, mentioning the meeting where Riliane was supposed to propose a ceasefire with Elphegort was supposed to happen today but now wasn’t going to anymore.
 * Allen’s narration regarding Minis’ competence during the revolution’s outbreak was changed from “Truly” to “For the first time since I became a servant, I felt respect for him.”
 * Riliane’s scene asking Allen what was the snack for today (bored) is continued, Allen pointing out she ate just a little while ago and her saying it was settled; she also tells him the matter with Elphegort is seemingly fixed as Minis said they’re pulling out the troops.
 * Continuing from previous point, Allen’s narration points out how the underlying meaning of what’s happening is what he’s afraid of, saying it’s already too late.
 * Allen’s last two lines of narration have a new line between them: “…… Minis was Minis after all.”
 * Germaine’s narration about the Lucifenian army being slowed in Elphegort by the natives because of Minage is expanded, qualifying that the one leading the forces, General George Ausdin, was man who even her father admitted the ability of and therefore would put them down if he arrived with his overwhelming forces.
 * Allen and Mariam’s dialogue together is greatly expanding, including Mariam kneeling to swear her allegiance to Prince Alexiel Lucifen d’Autriche and support his reign over that of Riliane’s, explaining her desire has been to protect the country Arth and Anne left behind, not the princess herself.
 * Allen’s narration mentions how her power/strength/intensity is different from both Leonhart and Elluka, continuing to swear allegiance to something and finding no significance to her existence otherwise, noting it seemed mad but realizing such loyalty to her “country” is the same feeling he has for Riliane and reminded him of someone else.
 * Allen orders her to continue protecting Riliane and Mariam gives up and seemingly brush it off as a joke. Their ensuing dialogue about what she plans to do now includes Mariam first saying she’ll do just as he commanded.
 * Allen’s last narration about Mariam seeming to be like his mother was made into an affirmed statement about how the two were a little similar.
 * New narration was added after Allen revealed his relation to Riliane to Gast, pointing out there was no more point to hiding his biggest secret he never talked about.
 * Allen’s dialogue with Gast is expanded, inserting Gast asking why he still insists on protecting Riliane if he knows this may even be retribution for their evil. Allen insists she’s also a kind person and believes that if one person can reach her as an ally and not an enemy; he finishes with his assertion to go against retribution as in the original dialogue.
 * New narration asserting questions if he was doing this out of indebtedness for killing Leonhart, defyiance of Elluka’s prophecy, or loyalty to the country like Mariam before narrating this was his own reason.
 * Allen’s narration is expanded, now mentioning Elluka’s prophecy of Lucifenia perishing and Riliane being beheaded at the guillotine, wondering what to do to prevent it before continuing with the original prose to find Riliane.
 * New narration inserted after Riliane asks if she’s going to die, reflecting how her appearance isn’t that of The Daughter of Evil he knew but that of a scared, adorable girl, and he doesn’t want to see that (it wasn’t what he was working so hard up until now to see).
 * Allen’s answer is now preceded with a “What’s going to happen to you after this?”
 * Allen’s final request to hear out her wish has a “once again” added to it.
 * Germaine’s narration about Gast’s swordplay is continued to describe how Germaine’s was lacking, Leonhart only training Allen seriously while teaching Germaine enough for self-defense only; she was frustrated and decided to study swordplay in secret and has now tested her skill in the revolution, besting Lucifenian regular soldiers.
 * Continuing from the previous bullet, she wonders if her father would be happy to see her or angry but can’t know anymore because they’ll never see each other, he’s gone from this world before reasserting her need to win the fight against the “monster” for her father and for the country.
 * New narration added concerning Mariam and the Three Heroes’ essentially being the reason Lucifenia could become such a big country, Leonhart being one of them making Germaine proud. Their names carved a piece of an era.
 * Germaine’s narration about them apparently winning at last is expanding, better portraying her inner feelings of uncertainty over how she feels about it and what will happen to the country in the future; also makes her intention is for it to be ruled by the revolutionary army, ie the people, explicit though qualifying whether the entire conference would acknowledge that was another matter.
 * Some narration is added throughout the passage to add new literary flow to the scene. York gets a new line about obeying Germaine’s desire for him to sit down and listen to Kyle first and exclaims his hope the Marlon king’s grateful for that.
 * Allen’s narration about Kyle reminding her of Allen is expanded, mentioning how Chartette’s story claimed the servants fled before the revolutionaries invaded and so he might’ve been  among them. Because it’s dangerous to be known as being from the palace right now, she wonders (and hopes) if he was safe and in hiding somewhere.
 * Germaine’s last conversation with Kyle is expanded, Kyle now asking if he was going [to see the princess] right away and Germaine answers of course as she has plenty to say to her.
 * Continuing from the last bullet, Kyle’s face goes “cloudy/dark” hearing that and tells her to not forget that she’s the representative of the revolution and the one who caused this. Germaine naturally wonders why he’s bringing that up now and that she’s well aware.
 * Germaine receives a new line when Kyle’s about to bring up the matter of Riliane’s execution, pointing out it was unnecessary to discuss the topic.
 * New narration added after the executioner talks to him and he describes the guillotine, narrating laughter at Elluka for her prophecy indeed coming to pass but her having the wrong interpretation, him being the one dressed as Riliane instead of it being Riliane herself.
 * continues to even assert the possibility the Riliane she saw in her dream wasn’t the real thing, proclaiming he changed the fate of the prophecy the mage certified. That he won. The blade just needs to fall in his neck (devolves into panic like the original text afterward).