User blog comment:PsychoPaleNoel/Ebony Invades Evillious Chapter 1/@comment-24526600-20140527000323

ok  so after reding dis i thenk dat u shud ad enoby's MOFER faktorz koz ur keepin us in da dark and i tenk dat u shuld ad moar milky omfg and woddyfok? ez alrdy da 2nd chaptr but we no c intimacy!!!! u need to describe charekter emotion more clerly and show developmenting!!!!