Talk:Kyle Marlon/@comment-26160852-20150811154611/@comment-26160852-20150812022212

"In EC 484, Kyle met Mikina Sfarz at one of the royal banquets and saw her scream and faint at the sight of a cat.undefinedShowing the talent required, the fourteen-year old Kyle [...] progressed quickly under the guidance of Margaret, his art teacher."

These two sentences seem awkard and unconnected with each other?...

Maybe this will work: "At some point, Kyle encountered his mother Prim's close friend Abyss I.R. and, unnerved by her cruelty, avoided her. In EC 484, Kyle met Mikina Sfarz at one of the royal banquets and saw her scream and faint at the sight of a cat." as one paragraph, and the next paragraph starts with "After showing the talent required, [...]"